Peer editing 2

1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
I think that you could talk about the difference between going to a college close-to-home versus going out of state could be interesting. This could show the difference between different types of college adjustments.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Another source could be a mom or dad who has a reaction to their child going away to college. The lead does involve me in the story very effectively.
3. Do the first 450 words contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Yes, the first 450 words contain a very well-defined scene, very well done
4. What questions would you like answered in the next 300 words? What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
I would like to hear more of what you personally are the most concerned about as far as moving away to college, or even what the majority of American teenagers are concerned about.